When November Died

edited February 2009 in General Discussion
When November died in ninety-eight
I went dancing in the rain
And if you came to waltz with me
You'd never be the same

The clouds above were dull and grey
But we were bloodied red
As eagles we flew above the hills
Swooping o'er the walking dead

On grassy hills hollow armor's strewn
Where the tired could no longer fly
So many came, so many slew
So many paused to die

Ten years have passed and still we war
For pride and honor alone
Now ground down to a steely corps
Time's attrition gnaws our bones

The battle's rage is all but spent
Our soldiers worn and weary
Yet rally round the banner men
And remember days less dreary

When November died in ninety-eight
And we went dancing in the rain
And all who came to soar with me
Would never be the same
- 'Nikolai'
In Honor of Dynamix

Comments

  • A nice poem indeed, however, you lose rhythm in some parts, but, you get it back in others. Nice work, anyway!
  • It was meant to be an ABCB scheme, so I changed fray to hills to keep from confusing readers. I make no presumptions of skill at this. I never took a poetry class (seriously) in my life. I was just inspired one night after playing Tribes in December 08 and slammed this out in about an hour.
  • That's an amazing poem, and so very Tribes like. It reminds me of the things that appear during the loading screens, like the poems and sayings and such.
  • Ask not for whom the booty is shaken





    for the booty is shaken for thee
  • It was meant to be an ABCB scheme, so I changed fray to hills to keep from confusing readers. I make no presumptions of skill at this. I never took a poetry class (seriously) in my life. I was just inspired one night after playing Tribes in December 08 and slammed this out in about an hour.
    It's in overall good poem. There were just a few parts that didn't seem to flow well. Great work!
  • I really appreciate those of you who took the time to pay a compliment, and also appreciate those who bit their tongues.
  • very well done

    I was able to keep the rythm fairly well.
  • My affair with the enemy flag!


    99
    I've been waiting so long
    Oh 99
    Where did we go wrong
    Oh 99
    I love you

    99
    I keep breaking your heart
    Oh 99
    How can we be apart
    Oh 99
    I love you

    I never thought it would happen
    I feel quite the same
    I don't want to hurt you anymore
    I never knew it would work out
    No one to blame
    You know i love you 99

    99
    You keep holding my hand
    Oh 99
    They don't know who i am
    Oh 99
    I love you

    I never thought it would happen
    I feel quite the same
    I don't want to hurt you anymore
    I never knew it would work out
    No one to blame
    You know i love you 99

    99
    I can't take it no more
    Oh 99
    Oh we were so sure
    Oh 99
    I love you

    I never thought it would happen
    I feel quite the same
    I don't want to hurt you anymore
    I never knew it would work out
    No one to blame
    You know i love you 99


    Okay I cheated... but not in the server! :)
  • Red on Blue

    The match is called,
    The heroes fly,
    Unto the steel gray sky.

    The colors mix with blood on sand,
    Red on blue they come to die.

    A broken stillness,
    An ended life,
    Stormhammer thunder rages.

    The match resets on zero count,
    Another newblood ages.
  • Awesome poem Nikolai, you are really great.
  • roses are blue violets are red
    may the bird of peace shit on your head.
  • roses are red violets are blue
    i have to poop
  • edited March 2009
    When November died in ninety-eight....

    o_o

    -November died?!?!?! NOOOOoooo.... ARE YOU FREAKING SERIOUS?!?!?! NO PLEASE!!! NOT NOVEMBER!!! The Earth's standard month-looping year has ended!!! HOW COULD THIS HAPPEN?!?!?! First Augtember and now November?!?!?! IS THE UNIVERSE GOING TO CEASE TO EXIST?!?!?! What's next?!?!?! 2+2 = 7 1/2?!?!?! Does the color grey finally find its way to the color wheel?!?!?! Does Chuck Norris finally fail miserably and die?!?!?! Did we finally realize that the earth is actually flat?!?!?! Is the moon actually a half eaten cookie?!?!?! Did yesterday become tomarow?!?!?! Is Star Wars actually based on a true story?!?!?! Did potatos finally become a fruit?!?!?! Can M & M's finally be alphabetized? Can fish really fly?!?!?! Did a tree finally run for president?!?!?! Can we finally "Has" Recon?!?!?! Did the internet become reality?!?!?! Did DudeBot finally shut up?!?!?! Did CocaCola become a color?!?!?! Can Chickens actually fly?!?!?! Is the cake a lie?!?!?! Did a Cow really jump over the moon?!?!?! Are Aliens really taking over the world?!?!?! Does money finally grow on trees?!?!?! Did Eolk finally come to his senses?!?!?! Is Shane SA in real life?!?!?! Can Thyth hack the real life physics system?!?!?! Is Krash Hosting the universe as a Server?!?!?! IS THE IMPOSSIBLE NOW POSSIBLE?!?!?! CAN NOVEMBER ACTUALLY DIE?!?!?! ARE ANY OF THESE THINGS ACTUALLY LOGICAL?!?!?!

    I. DON'T. THINK. SO.

    FAIL!!!!

    Lol. (Jk) XD < < < < < < < < < < <
  • "When Novemember Died" refers to Starsiege: Tribes' November 31st release date. It was the end of November 1998. By referring to the date as a death it sets the somber tone of the poem and helps transmit a nostalgic, almost mournful tone.

    Lern2reedPoeticLiscense kthxbai.

    (also JK)
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